Doas this sound like a start of something?

[Lee]

Sunday 6/8/2008 4:35 am

Why do I like her so.
She doasn't evan know I'm alive.
Is it because the way I live.
Is it because I think I got may heart broken.
Or is it because she's the Invisible Love.
More likely the Invisible Rebound.

[Lee]

Well, if isn't just say so no. Don't just ignore me.

[MissyO]

It sounds like the start of a crush......

Seriously, you can take a piece anywhere you want, you don't need our approval for that boyo.

[Lee]

Originally Posted by MissyO

It sounds like the start of a crush......

Seriously, you can take a piece anywhere you want, you don't need our approval for that boyo.

Would it still be called a crush if it as being going on between 6 to 8 years.
Or mabey it hasn't really started yet because my problems.
If I died, I bet thats the only why I can (Be by her side).
Or mabey thats already started and mabey thats where (Invisible Love) came from.
Oh is it so wroung to have a crush?
Mabey I'm writing all this because so she can read it or somebody else reads it and it will get back to her.
Oh and mabey she'll think I'm a J??? A??.
Get mad at me so she'll have to see who I am.

[Lee]

Yeah, it's a start of something that your showing how stupid you can be!

[Captain Beefheart]

Maybe you should just write her a letter with all those thoughts. It's not that you aren't cut for poetry, I mean there's really no flow, playfullness of words, rhythm, sophistication, grace, harmony to it, and most of that doesn't come from sum whim of a neurotic afterthought or any of the usual pretenses.

I don't mean to put you down or anything, I mean Kerouac was a great writer, but not a good poet. Maybe you should just try another medium.